2019-20 Season Preview
Hi, guys, I have written a preview for our 2019-20 season at /footballleaguefc.com/stevenage/ Please give it a quick read and give me honest feedback. have a nice day.
Re: 2019-20 Season Preview
The first was in your first sentence should maybe be a were, the second one definitely should.
The second paragraph is one sentence weirdly split into two, same for the third and fourth paragraphs. Starting sentences with "So" and "While" does not read well, they should be continuations of points from earlier in the sentence.
It should be drew no drawn in paragraph 5.
Paragraph 6 is one sentence making two entirely separate points and should be split, particularly since paragraph 7 is directly related to the second of those points and thus could be merged with the second half of paragraph 6. I can't believe it has been 6 seasons already! That was an interesting thing to point out (as was our vulnerability to last minute goals last season, and the unusual finance initiative).
The third paragraph of the "Manager" section would read better without "that is" but it should be interesting for readers less familiar with Stevenage FC to hear about Dino's background.
R.e. the penultimate paragraph of that section, our most successful spell last season (which you refer to in an earlier paragraph) was not playing 4-4-2.
There is random capitalisation in Paul Digby's section on the word "Holding"
There's interesting info in there, particularly for non-Stevenage fans looking to see how the team has changed over the summer, though in places it's off-puttingly written and doesn't do the content justice.